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By, Yoonjin, Ko (200700121)
I don't see any reasons for adopted children not to find out the identity of their birth parents. Even though their foster parents took care of them well, still there are enough reasons for them to look forward to meeting their birth parents. I don't think that finding birth parents is some kind of betrayal act or something that could hurt their adoptive parents. On the contrary, it could even have some positive effects on everyone including those adopted children, adoptive parents, and birth parents as well.
First, by finding their birth parents, adopted children could realize their own identity as well. Personal identity which could be the fundamental reason to exist, is very important to build up confidence and understand them fully. Some of adopted children have an identity crisis when they find out that they were adopted. When they realize their foster parents are not the birth parents and they are not physically related with their parents, in most cases, adopted children have hard time for understanding the fact and accept the reality. Mostly, this fact might lead them to feel helpless and desperate. Therefore, finding their birth parents could fill or at least try to fill the emptiness which most of adopted children have in their heart because of the fact that they were abandoned or unwanted from their birth parents.
Second, if adopted children meet their birth parents, they could find out reasons or background situation why their parents sent them to be adopted. You might think that this is not necessary, but I believe this is the chance to make huge step toward understanding and accepting the fact that they were adopted. I don't think that parents made their mind to give up their children easily or even willingly. So, if adopted children find out those hopeless situations which their birth parents had to face with, they could understand their parents from their heart.
Lastly, it is also a good idea for foster parent to let their adopted children find their birth parents because it doesn't mean that they would lose their children. After their adopted children find out their birth parents, they would realize the foster parents' effort and hard work while they raise them. I'm not saying that they adopted children because of some kind of compensation. But from the understanding how their foster parents raise them with great care, now adopted children can build their new relationship with their foster parents as well.
In conclusion, if those adopted children want to meet their birth parent or find out their identity, nobody can stop them doing so because it's their ways to find out their personal identification. And this is also good for foster parent as I mentioned before. Therefore, we shouldn't consider the action to find birth parent as a betrayal act for their foster parents. Thank you for reading my essay.
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Saturday, May 7, 2011
Positive effects by finding birth parents. (200700121)
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Yoonjin,
ReplyDeleteyour main point seems that finding birth parents have some positive effects on everyone including adopted children, adoptive parents and birth parents. It provides clear clue that how you will write this from now on. I like your way because I think that clear thesis help reader understand your standpoint.
However, I am concerned about using "could". I not sure of your intention, you used many "could" in your overall essay but it can be replaced by "can" or something else. Especially, in your second body paragraph, if you meant to express real conditionals, "can" would be the right word, I think. A couple of weeks ago, I was also indicated these habitual mistakes by the professor. You might remember that.^^
I hope my comment helps you write second draft. Thank you!
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ReplyDeleteI don't see any reasons for adopted children not to find out the identity of their birth parents. Even though their foster parents took care of them well, still there are enough reasons for them to look forward to meeting their birth parents. I don't think that finding birth parents is some kind of betrayal act or something that could hurt their adoptive parents. On the contrary, it may even have some positive effects on everyone including those adopted children, adoptive parents, and birth parents as well.
First, by finding their birth parents, adopted children can realize their own identity as well. Personal identity which is the fundamental reason to exist, is very important to build up confidence and understand them fully. Some of adopted children have an identity crisis when they find out that they were adopted. When they realize their foster parents are not the birth parents and they are not physically related with their parents, in most cases, adopted children go through hard times for understanding the fact and accept the reality. Mostly, this fact might lead them to feel helpless and desperate. Therefore, finding their birth parents could fill or at least try to fill the emptiness which most of adopted children have in their heart because of the fact that they were abandoned or unwanted from their birth parents.
Second, if adopted children meet their birth parents, they can find out reasons or background situation why their parents sent them to be adopted. You might think that this is not necessary, but I believe this is the chance to make huge step toward understanding and accepting the fact that they were adopted. I don't think that parents made their mind to give up their children easily or even willingly. So, if adopted children find out those hopeless situations which their birth parents had to face with, they could understand their parents from their heart.
Lastly, it is also a good idea for foster parent to let their adopted children find their birth parents because it doesn't mean that they would lose their children. After their adopted children find out their birth parents, they would realize the foster parents' effort and hard work while they raise them. I'm not saying that they adopted children because of some kind of compensation. But from the understanding how their foster parents raise them with great care, now adopted children can build their new relationship with their foster parents as well.
In conclusion, if those adopted children want to meet their birth parent or find out their identity, nobody can stop them doing so because it's their ways to find out their personal identification. And this is also good for foster parent as I mentioned before. Therefore, we shouldn't consider the action to find birth parent as a betrayal act for their foster parents. Thank you for reading my essay.